Thesis:
Is there a clear thesis?
The thesis is as follows: "Bishop's book connects to the question of why Bridgewater is still dry because Bishop talks about how people during the sort are expressing their politics, not so much through voting, but through making lifestyle choices that reflect their values and beliefs." I believe it is also important to discuss how Bridgewater is an example of the sort. Include what you say about how Bridgewater is an elitist town and people want to remain there because of this in your thesis.
Does it take a position on how the writer’s event, issue or culture challenges or supports (some part of) Bishop’s theory or another theory drawn from psychology, sociology, etc.?
Yes, the thesis addresses Bishop.

Generic Conventions:
Does the piece provide a background section including a summary of Bishop’s or another theory and a description of the community’s politics supported by at least one scholarly source?
The summary section is strong. You provide the example of the library and Charles Tiebout's ideas.
Does the essay provide a body section that is organized, well-supported and presents and responds to counterarguments?
I am not sure if you use counterargument in your paper.

Support:
Is it varied (including definitions, examples, etc.)?
Examples and photographs are used. The photographs really enhance your support.
Is each piece of evidence that is included—any quotation, for instance--followed up by analysis explaining how it serves as evidence for a point the writer is making?
Yes.
Are counterarguments and counterevidence acknowledged?
See above.
Does the writer use more than one piece of evidence in each body paragraph?
You keep each body paragraph very focused by only dealing with one piece of evidence.

Unity:
Does the title suggest the topic and argument of the argument synthesis paper?
Yes.
Does the lead provide an engaging example, ask a provocative question, etc. that leads the reader toward understanding what the writer’s position is?
The topic of a dry town is definitely interesting.
Do the topic sentences make references to the thesis’s argument?
The topic sentences are very strong.
Does the writer come back to the thesis’s argument near body paragraph endings?
Yes.
Do “pros” of the writer’s argument for the source’s persuasiveness connect with the “cons”? Consider how the pros and cons challenge and/or support (some part of) Bishop’s or another theory; this should be obvious.
You connect Bishop's ideas to Bridgewater.

Coherence:
Do the topic sentences introduce the full content of the paragraphs they introduce?
For the most part, yes.
Are quotes dropped in, or (1) does the writer let you know what quotes are examples of and how they support his/her argument in this paragraph or (2) does the writer use signal phrases (such as “she notes,” “he asserts,” etc.)?
Quotes are introduced nicely.
Are transitions provided within and between paragraphs (“Not only is this church…but it is also…”; “first,” “second” and “third”; etc.)
Transitions are provided.

Creativity:
Does the voice of the writer seem specific to her or him somehow—or as if it could have been written by anyone?
You have a strong narrative voice.
Is there a paragraph or example that convinces you to agree—or disagree—with the writer? Why do you think that’s so?
The paragraph that starts with, "The idea of maintaining..." is really strong. It was this paragraph that convinced me that Bridegwater does in fact support the sort. People who live in an elitist down are going to want their town to remain elitist.

Mechanics/style issues:
Do you see any clarity errors—including sentences that should be combined, uses of mixed grammar, etc.—or other grammatical or punctuation errors, such as sentence fragments, misuses of commas, etc.?
There are definitely some general grammar errors. I edited these on the hard copy of your paper.

MLA:
Are there citations in each sentence where there is a quote or borrowed idea?
No. You need to be sure to cite when paraphrasing as well as quoting.
Are the in-text citations correct (providing author’s last name and page number)?
I'm under the assumption you could not find the author of a number of your sources.
Are there a correctly formatted Works Cited page and Works Cited page entry here?
The Works Cited page is correctly formatted.